Diary of an Edit #4
January 27th, 2010
Okay, here goes another round. I can do this. I can do this! … ah, I’m distracted!
Just get over this hurdle and then it’ll flow. Chop, chop and little by little you cut the tree down. :(
*cries, pouts, stomps feet* This hurts.
Flowed and died.
Oh I suck. But flowing better now. Like a river over rocks. Slow but it’ll get there.
Hahaha, that sucks but it hurt less to write it.
I’m not happy with this piece but I think this is all the editing I’m going to do for the moment. Even my best excerpt of the day sucks.
“You know Halloween is still half a year away, right?”
The man glared at her, eyes too bright and clear like Franq’s but with enough emotion that she knew she could piss this individual off if she really tried. He stood there in a light gray business suit, burgundy tie tight to his neck beneath a crisp white collar. It was nice, expensive looking but definitely in good style with well picked fabrics. Not a single crease was out of place…
But his hair certainly was. Long brown tresses spiked straight up the middle of his scalp. With safety pins and spiked studs adorning his ears and nose she wondered if he had to mail order the suit or if they’d actually taken him seriously when he’d gone to purchase it from whatever poor place he chose to do business with.
Oh, well. Better luck later tonight.
wow! i can really see how you have advanced! that is a terrific character sketch :)
You think so? I thought it sucked terribly but I might be speaking from a ‘too’ close perspective again. :) That’s the other good reason about posting these snippets up. :D