Comments on: One Last Word http://written-whispers.com/blog/2009/07/23/one-last-word/ Spiritually Strange and Grammaticly Screwed Mon, 28 Nov 2011 13:25:36 +0000 hourly 1 http://wordpress.org/?v=3.3.1 By: Spirit http://written-whispers.com/blog/2009/07/23/one-last-word/comment-page-1/#comment-3918 Spirit Sat, 15 Aug 2009 08:22:59 +0000 http://written-whispers.com/blog/?p=1239#comment-3918 *waves muchly* :D I've always had a bit of a love/like relationship with my inner poet. I enjoy writing stories too much to go straight to poetry but at the same time I know I could be really good at it if I put more of my heart into it. At the same time though- I only feel like I do really good poetry when I'm non-happy emotional, nevertheless- I'm learning to write more prose for the happier chunks of my life so mayhaps we'll see more and more. :D Thankies muchly. I really need to stop by your blog sometime. *waves muchly* :D

I’ve always had a bit of a love/like relationship with my inner poet. I enjoy writing stories too much to go straight to poetry but at the same time I know I could be really good at it if I put more of my heart into it. At the same time though- I only feel like I do really good poetry when I’m non-happy emotional, nevertheless- I’m learning to write more prose for the happier chunks of my life so mayhaps we’ll see more and more. :D Thankies muchly. I really need to stop by your blog sometime.

]]> By: Spirit http://written-whispers.com/blog/2009/07/23/one-last-word/comment-page-1/#comment-3917 Spirit Sat, 15 Aug 2009 08:19:09 +0000 http://written-whispers.com/blog/?p=1239#comment-3917 Ah, ha! Don't you hate that and it's probably on the tip of your tongue too! :D I do that from time to time as well when trying to remember the lines of some of my favorite creations. I can remember them any other time- silly little buggers. My original line for that first bit was going to be 'lily lidded lies' but I wasn't sure if it was too far prosey or not. *shrugs* I'm glad you like it- this one just sort of exploded out of me. I'm starting to figure I have two different modes for writing poetry. When I'm trying- I rhyme. When I'm not trying (a.k.a. stuck in the moment of an emotion) I get stuff like this. :D It's wonderful, thankies for sharring yours, I likies muchly. You'll coax a poet out of me yet! :D Ah, ha! Don’t you hate that and it’s probably on the tip of your tongue too! :D I do that from time to time as well when trying to remember the lines of some of my favorite creations. I can remember them any other time- silly little buggers.
My original line for that first bit was going to be ‘lily lidded lies’ but I wasn’t sure if it was too far prosey or not. *shrugs* I’m glad you like it- this one just sort of exploded out of me. I’m starting to figure I have two different modes for writing poetry. When I’m trying- I rhyme. When I’m not trying (a.k.a. stuck in the moment of an emotion) I get stuff like this. :D It’s wonderful, thankies for sharring yours, I likies muchly.

You’ll coax a poet out of me yet! :D

]]> By: LisaB http://written-whispers.com/blog/2009/07/23/one-last-word/comment-page-1/#comment-3831 LisaB Mon, 27 Jul 2009 21:22:59 +0000 http://written-whispers.com/blog/?p=1239#comment-3831 This is very good. You should write poetry more often as you obviously have a knack for it. I also like the lines that Jessie commented on. Additionally, the next to the last stanza is quite powerful. Overall, it presents a commentary with which I believe many could identify. I know I have felt the cutting edge of similar shadows many times in my life. Hope to hear from you soon! ~LisaB. This is very good. You should write poetry more often as you obviously have a knack for it. I also like the lines that Jessie commented on. Additionally, the next to the last stanza is quite powerful. Overall, it presents a commentary with which I believe many could identify. I know I have felt the cutting edge of similar shadows many times in my life. Hope to hear from you soon! ~LisaB.

]]> By: Jessie Carty http://written-whispers.com/blog/2009/07/23/one-last-word/comment-page-1/#comment-3826 Jessie Carty Fri, 24 Jul 2009 22:44:28 +0000 http://written-whispers.com/blog/?p=1239#comment-3826 There are some absolutely stellar lines in this one Spirit! For example "Telling me all your white lidded lies." and "Born beautiful with a practiced edge" you are getting there! This reminds me a lot of a poem I wrote when I was about 16 or so, or here is what I remember of it. Just for you! Dark so Dark No light appears Huddled in a corner Shrinking away from my fears Sally loves me though. shoot - now I can't remember the rest but the girl is huddled in a closet and there is a line about twisted triangular snakes that i really liked :) There are some absolutely stellar lines in this one Spirit!
For example “Telling me all your white lidded lies.” and “Born beautiful with a practiced edge” you are getting there!

This reminds me a lot of a poem I wrote when I was about 16 or so, or here is what I remember of it. Just for you!

Dark so Dark
No light appears
Huddled in a corner
Shrinking away from my fears
Sally loves me though.

shoot – now I can’t remember the rest but the girl is huddled in a closet and there is a line about twisted triangular snakes that i really liked :)

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